I remember being a little surprised at seeing only one or two typos. You use the English language very well, in fact, impressively well. On the other ...hand, the characters are wooden, some of the dialogue is stilted, and the plot is very predictable. It would be possible to spruce up the characters and fix the dialogue, but the plot, well, it would be hard to do much to it without a major rewrite. I'm normally far out of town so wouldn't be able to work with you personally, but I could give you. The audience wend wild and cheered madelywhile I was kneeling in a tub full of. Milk poop and cum, still diligentlyholding those stupid banana peels over my banana shaped bobbles. When this was over, music started playing and the audience broke up into groups,mingling, and drinking cocktails. The Mistress walked over to me, picked upa small solid piece of milk-poop from the basin and rolled it into a ball saying, ?Yourpunishment is over shit hole. But you're to spend the rest of the evening. ”The angel reached down again and came up with a beat-up, no-thrills Savage Axis.“Is this your rifle?” the angel asked.“Yes,” the hunter replied softly and rather ashamedly. The angel was pleased with the man’s honesty and ended up giving him all three rifles to keep, and the hunter went home happy.A week later, the hunter was walking with his wife along the riverbank, showing her where the miracle occurred, when his wife fell into the river and disappeared under the water. When he cried out. I knew you looked good but to night, you look super great, tonight." I bet you look at some very pretty beautiful girls at school all day, every day, that looks a lot better than I do to you." No I don't. You have all the girls at school put to shame with your looks mom." If I didn't know better, I would say you are trying to get into my pantys tonight." If you wasn't my mom, yes I would, for sure if I knew how to, maybe go about it." Oh wow. You better give me five minutes to freshen up then.