You are definitely thinking too small. You can’t possibly build up that sense of social pressures that would trigger a revolution as you describe in... your outline in two chapters. Get real.“I know you’re trying to capture what is happening in this country today. Look around you. The current political crisis has been building for decades. You have the people storming the capital without any kind of plan in place for solving the problems of the world, yet in one chapter you have a whole new system. Luckily no oneknew that I was present except Helen."I can quite believe it," said Guy Repton with a hateful snigger. "Ithink that you are all a little unjust to poor Evelyn. I don't thinkthat his nature is really bad, but as a boy he was not in his properposition. He must have known that dressed in male clothes he lookedsilly and ridiculous, and no doubt he felt uncomfortable, and that veryprobably made him arrogant and intolerable. But dressed and treated asa girl he would no longer have. Whatever the situation it didn't change the fact that there were many women not amused by this erotic story. Some claimed it as not being erotic but a chauvinistic example of what's wrong with society today, while others scoffed at how far fetched it seemed to have such a weak character with low self esteem as to be referred to as a slut and a cock sucker.But is it really so far fetched, taking that there were some "whores" that would have jumped on the opportunity to be on their knees?Well,. Alas, it wasn't to be. I could have handled the feeling of Megan's pussy around my dick. I could have even handled the sounds she was making in response to my dick. What I couldn't take was having Lisa there. The buzzing of her vibrator kept reminding me we were not alone. The novelty of being watched had a definite effect on me. Whenever I looked her way, I saw Lisa's blue eyes watching me intently. On top of that, she had such a sweet way of moaning as her own orgasm approached. And, I have.