It was up for less than eight hours and I started getting emails. Most were complimentary but several with some sincere criticism. I went back and did... a thorough spell and punctuation check, and fixed some run on sentences, also paragraphs were too long. One person pointed out that I was being unrealistic on how long I was having my character hit a golf ball, the story was a fantasy but hey he was right about it being unrealistic, and he had brought it up politely so no reason not to make a. My mouth is on yours, my tongue probing, dying to taste you. Our bodies are starting to move of their own volition, our skin still damp as the heat radiates around us in the chilly hallway. I break first, reaching for my ID and sliding it through a panel in the wall. We push through the door and up the staircase, and with another swipe of my card, the door opens into a large room with a glass floor. Underneath the floor are giant hammerheads and reef sharks much bigger than the others in the. I see you sitting in a chair across the room, sitting tall and smiling. I start towards you wearing a black negligee` and a white satin g-string. I pause briefly to press play on the stereo. As I stand in front of you, I run my hand down my neck and over my tit making sure to circle around the nipple. Then I carefully straddle your lap and wrap my hands around the back of your neck. I gently kiss your forehead, then lips, and make my way over to your ear. I gently put the tip of your earlobe. I can tell you are so turned on after listening to me come in your headphones. With your legs open as wide as they can be, my right hand begins to travel down over your stomach, over your belly button to the top of your black panties. It slips under them but then comes back up to your breast.As my right hand comes up, my left goes down, slipping into the top of your panties, but not touching you. It then comes back up to your left breasts and squeezes as I gently nibble on your right shoulder.I.